• I have gone through and made some final small adjustments to the green text; my changes are in TNR italics, so they should be clear.  Mr. A, 2008-05-09, 7:52 a.m.
• I also made some separate comments on Matt's portion at the bottom.  I highlighted in green everything that was right and put in a few TNR italics notes.  Just because a piece isn't green doesn't mean it's totally wrong, just not correct enough to highlight: I wasn't going to "green" individual words. 

This conspiracy was declared to the Helvetians through informers. In accordance with their custom they coerced Orgetorix to plead his case in chains. If Orgetorix would be condemned, the penalty would be being burned by fire.

 This conspiracy was declared to the Helvitians through informers. In accordance with their customs, they forced Orgetorix to plead his case in chains. If Orgetorix were condemned the penalty would be that he would be burned by fire. (to be burned by fire - pleonasm - use of really more words than, strictly speaking, are absolutely totally necessary and need to complete the meaning fully)

The day having been established to plead his case,  he forced all of his household and 10 thousand men to the trial. 

He led all his retainor and debtors to the same place, of which he had a great number.

Thru these he made his escape and did not plead his case. 

 On the day established for pleading his case, Orgetorix gathered from all sides all his household, about ten thousand people, to the trial. (With the day having been established for pleading his case). He led together (conduxit) all his retainers and debtors to the same place, of whom he had a great number. Through their efforts, he escaped and didn't plead his case.

With the citizens having been urged on  for this thing (having been incited on account of this thing), he tried to establish his equipment right and a  magistrate was gathering a large number of men out of the fields, and Orgetorix was dead. The Helvetians believed that Orgetorix had killed himself.

 Although the state, riled up because of this situation, tried to carry out its law by force, and the magistrates were gathering a great number of people from the country side, Orgetorix was dead. (Orgetorix died, which would probably change the Cum to when). The Helvetians thought that Orgetorix had killed himself.

It was made known to the Helvetians that through the informers (Is this Matt's section?  The beginning is fine, but "that conspiracy" is the subject of the "was made known") there was a conspiracy.With their customs they chained him for his case. If Orgetorix was (Make it "were.") sentenced, the punishment would be to be burned by fire. (On) The Day established  ("for pleading" is correct because dictionis is a noun, not a verb, but otherwise it's okay) to plead his case Orgetorix's decision wil be based on all of the families themselves, to the from all sides 10,000 men united. All of the retainers were themselves debtors, which held great numbers, brought together to the same place. (Through was not led for reason and of his escape.)? Since the citizens to urge on, (arm they attempted)? and they (The "they" is the "magistrates.") drove together from the fields with the greatest number of men, Orgetorix was dead. The Helvetians themselves (You have double translated the ipsum, which is a singular form, so it can only refer to Orgetorix, not to the Helvetians.) believed Orgetorix himself committed suicide.  

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